本文共计1677个文字，预计阅读时间需要7分钟。
剑15写作test1小作文范文 第1篇
题干中有几个关键词：买房，而不是，租房，重要。
特别提示：“重要”一词体现的是一种价值判断，这道题讨论的是为什么人们认为重要，所以需要从人的出发进行构思--认为买房更重要的人们有什么诉求，背后有什么动机？同时，别只光顾着说写房为什么重要，还要写道为什么“不是租房”？
对于组合题，一般我们要按照次序回答问题，防止逻辑混乱，一个问题可以写一整段，也可以将较长篇幅的一段分为两个自然段。
对于这道题，考官给出了7分的范文，这在考场上算是非常不错的佳作了，让我们一起研读一下7分范文，从中学习一些写作方法。
范文解析
范文解析：
CC：文章的分段很合理，全文逻辑如下：
第一段开头介绍背景信息。
剑15写作test1小作文范文 第2篇
[1] where引导的定语从句
[2] adv. 略微地，只能用来修饰形容词比较级，不能修饰形容词原级
[3] 分词状语，range from ...to...范围在...到...之间
[4] with的独立主格，此处用法为with+宾语+adj作为补语
[5] n. 受欢迎程度，避免反复提及the percentage of...
The pattern[6], however, is different in Adelaide, where instant coffee is people’s preference[7], with[8] half of them involved[9] in the purchase[10]. The percentage of cafe visitors is quite similar, at just below 50%, while fresh coffee is the least popular.
[6] n. 模式
[7] n. 偏好
[8] with的独立主格，此处用法为with+宾语+过去分词作为补语
[9] 过去分词. 参与
[10] n. 购买
剑15写作test1小作文范文 第3篇
Step 1：基本信息
该图的统计对象是城市居民的数量，单位是百分比；
五个城市，即五组数据；
每一组数据有三个分类统计，分别是在过去四周内买过现煮咖啡，在过去四周内买过速溶咖啡，在过去四周内去过咖啡厅买咖啡或者茶。
Step：整体情况
我们在课堂上强调过：多组静态数据需要组内比较和组间比较。
组内比较，即，每一组数据内部的高低大小情况。通过观察和对比每组数据，我们不难发现，这五组数据之间的共性是较为明显的：去咖啡厅和买速溶咖啡的人所占的百分比超过买现煮咖啡的人，其中，除Adelaide外，去咖啡厅的人数比重基本上都是最高的，均超过50%，买速溶咖啡的人数占比在五个城市都是超过45%。
组间比较，即，组别之间的数据大小情况。我们也不难看出三种人群分别在哪些城市占比较高，以及排序情况。同时，我们也可以发现数据的分布形态方面，Brisbane和Adelaide较为相似，Sydney和Melbourne较为相似。
Step 3：重要细节
该图数据较多，有哪些数据必须要写呢？
剑15写作test1小作文范文 第4篇
The bar chart gives information about people’s habits of purchasing and drinking coffee and tea in different cities in Australia, according to the results of a survey.
To sum up, it can be immediately seen that people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits are similar in all five cities except in Adelaide.
Buying coffee or tea in a cafe is the most popular among the people in Sydney as well as Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, especially in Sydney where almost 63% of drinkers have such a habit. The proportions of cafe visitors are marginally lower in the other three cities, ranging from 56% to 62%. However, the percentage of fresh coffee buyers is the smallest in all four cities, with that of the buyers in Brisbane the lowest, at merely 34%. Meanwhile, the popularity of drinking instant coffee is between that of visiting a cafe and that of buying fresh coffee.
The pattern, however, is different in Adelaide, where instant coffee is people’s preference, with half of them involved in the purchase. The percentage of cafe visitors is quite similar, at just below 50%, while fresh coffee is the least popular.
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剑15写作test1小作文范文 第5篇
Step 1：开头段
在这一段中，我们可以按照常规的写作方法改写原题。
Step 2：主体段
在主体段中，我们需要合理地分为2-3个自然段，分段方式有很多，我们可以选择最合适的方式。
这道题的分段方式上我们有两个选择：
1. 按照三种人群进行分段，也就是数据的分类；
2. 按照组别之间的相似度进行分段，也就是城市的情况。
Step 3：结尾段
结尾段不可以再出现细节，需要宏观的概括，比如这道题中，最主要的几个信息有：这五个城市的情况总体来说比较相似的，人们都倾向于去咖啡厅，其次是买速溶，而买现煮咖啡的人普遍占比较小。
考官给出了6分的范文，大家可以自行阅读。
这里达人老师给出一篇质量更高的范文，供大家参考学习。
参考范文：
The bar chart gives facts about the consumer spending habits of drinking coffee and tea in five large Australian cities.
It is immediately apparent that the majority of residents preferred dropping by a cafe in all five cities except Adelaide. Melbourne recorded the highest percentage of people who visited a cafe for coffee or tea in the last four weeks at nearly 65%, followed by Hobart and Sydney.
In contrast, no more than half of the residents went to a cafe in Adelaide, the only city where buying instant coffee was actually slightly more common in the past month. Nevertheless, the proportion of people who reported having bought instant coffee did not exceed 55% in each city, the figure for Sydney standing at the benchmark of 45%.
Compared with the aforementioned two practices, consuming fresh coffee was far less popular in all five cities. The data in this category ranged from the 34% in Brisbane and Adelaide at the joint bottom to 43% in Sydney.
Overall, it can be clearly observed from the chart that the five Australian cities shared a similar pattern regarding the coffee drinking habits in the last month, with cafe-visiting and instant coffee favored over fresh coffee by the vast majority of the residents.
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